yopparaisaru
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I drink copious amounts of fire and piss excellence
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Post by yopparaisaru on Apr 17, 2008 8:45:55 GMT 8
Hey all, I'm doin one of my teacher friends a favor and proofreading his paper. (He's studying for his teaching certification now). Anyway on a mostly grammatically correct and easily understandable if horribly contextually wrong word usage i come a sentence in which i have no idea how to really correct. I understand what he's trying to say, but without re-writing the entire thing I don't know how to fix it. So if you have a few minutes to spare here's the sentence... btw the paper is about the recent trend towards non-smoking in japan.
"Thus, indeed smokiing make non-smokers displeasure and ill health but I don't think smoking is worse than useless."
Thanks all
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Post by junkdna on Apr 17, 2008 9:26:49 GMT 8
Thus, while indeed smoking can cause non-smokers discomfort and bring about health problems, I don't believe smoking is worthless.
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yopparaisaru
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I drink copious amounts of fire and piss excellence
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Post by yopparaisaru on Apr 17, 2008 9:35:00 GMT 8
Thanks was still havin trouble with the second part of the sentence...
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Post by junkdna on Apr 17, 2008 9:38:36 GMT 8
To be honest, I would like to hear this guy's arguements. Sounds like he fried all his brain cells from too many years of smoking.
PS Congrats on 100 posts. -1 Negative Karma for you.
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yopparaisaru
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I drink copious amounts of fire and piss excellence
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Post by yopparaisaru on Apr 17, 2008 9:46:47 GMT 8
thanks and NOOO!!!!! my karma!!!! lol
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yopparaisaru
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I drink copious amounts of fire and piss excellence
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Post by yopparaisaru on Apr 17, 2008 10:00:45 GMT 8
His arguments for smoking are rather thin and weak actually. Of his 4 paragraphs, 1 is devoted to arguments against and 1 to for smoking. However he supplies 3 points of why smoking is bad, and only 1 for good. Even that one is circumspect. he argues that smoking isn't worthless because people who smoke "have fellow feelings for each other." So if you smoke and I smoke, and we never met each other before, I can easily start a onversation and perhaps a friendship with, "You gotta light?" or "Crap, I'm out, mind if I bum a cig?" While his arguments against smoking are, its unhealthly and causes bad diseases, smokers are rude and dirty, by smoking in crowds of non-smokers and by throwing their butts on the ground. "Non-smokers must not forgive them." That was about it...
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Post by junkdna on Apr 17, 2008 10:34:17 GMT 8
>.>
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